Issue Paper-final draft

Taiwan’s televised news violence: the lurking inciter of school bullying should be prevented by the audience
    In recent years, school bullying becomes the hot issue in Taiwan. The public starts to care about this issue because they often see the reports about school bullying on television. Even the government begins to value the seriousness of school bullying. We might think that it is Taiwan’s televised news that arouse the society’s attention to the already-existed problem and call on the public to prevent the recurrence of school bullying, but is it as such a good contributor as what we think? The truth is, Taiwan’s televised news does not just a propeller of concerning about school bullying, but also a potential inciter of school bullying.
    In fact, school bullying results from multiple elements: cultural factor, social issue, family reason, and personal element, etc. Yet I only want to explore the influence of the televised news on school bullying in Taiwan because what makes the problem into the issue is Taiwan’s news, and the televised news are the primary force. In the process of discussing the relationship between Taiwan’s televised news and school bullying, some think that Taiwan’s extravagant and biased televised news have effects on the aggressiveness among the young; while others protest that argument and disbelieve that the televised news violence will lead school bullying. Thus, another issue pops out: does Taiwan’s televised news really incite the occurrence of school bullying? If it does, what sorts of the way does we the audience take to prevent the problem?
    As I express my views in the first paragraph, I think that Taiwan’s televised news is the potential stimulator of school bullying due to the media violence and its reporting way. The media violence means the violent scenes and behaviors appearing in the media content. Taiwan’s televised news often presents this kind of events and reports them with the overstated title and unjust story. On account of that, the young viewers may not be able to treat the news violence appropriately but be induced to imitate the violent behaviors, and school bullying happens as a result. So, that should surely be prevented. However, the preventive measure cannot be so plain like constraining the televised news directly. The better and effective way is that the audience actively supervises the televised news to prompt them to improve their reporting quality and instruct the young viewers about the news literacy education concretely. With the viewers’ stress and evaluation of the news literacy, Taiwan’s news violence will lessen, and so does its potential risk bringing about school bullying.

Reflection 2

    So far, I am gradually clear about what thesis I want to write and being able to find out the annotations which can support my discourse appropriately. I feel uplifted at this improvement, but I know that there is still room to progress my writing and thinking. As the teacher's advice, the solution of news literacy education mentioned in my annotation 4 should be more concrete to become more convincing. Likewise, my previous annotations also need revised in this way. As for my issue topic, I will rethink it and relate it to the relation between Taiwan's televised news violence and school bullying. Firstly, I would like to prove the influence of news violence on school bullying in the annotation 1, taking the annotation 2 and 3 for examples, and then make my annotation 4 for defending my argument to resolve the issue. To do my research paper efficiently and progressively, I make the working plan as follows:

Step 1: Review and Organize my previous compositions

Step 2: Read over teacher's handouts and Revise my previous compositions

Step 3: Integrate my compositions into the research paper and qualify it in APA Style

Step 4: Finish my research paper and review it

    With achieving four steps, I hope that my research paper can communicate not only with the readers but also with myself.

Annotation 4-draft 2

Enhancement of Young Students' News Literacy Education: The Feasible Way to Improve Taiwan's Worse News Quality
According to Yu-ling Lin, the author of the essay, it is possible that the cultivation of the young students’ critical thinking through enhancing news literacy education is able to urge the improvement of present Taiwan’s news quality. He thinks that the currently over-sensational and overstating news reports resulting in the worse quality of news need to be changed by the audience supervision. And the appropriate supervision has to have the enhancement of news literacy education which is better to start with the young students. In the investigation to prove his discourse, he takes seven young students as subjects to be encouraged and instructed not only to criticize the objectivity of the news but also to reflect themselves what influence of the news on them after watching the news animation about school bullying. The result is that they admit that they have had the experience of bullying and find out the effect of the news on the way they think one thing or event. After receiving the news literacy education, they even post the instruction of that on Facebook Page to let more people enable to learn it. With this experiment, the essay advocates that the teaching and practice of news literacy education on young students seems to be the feasible way to improve Taiwan’s worse news quality.
Indeed, Taiwan’s news is often filled with the exaggerated and biased reporting context to appeal more Taiwan’s viewers who solely accept the information the news provides but lack the deep thinking on the reports. When we watch the televised news, we often bear the curiosity and amusement for the report instead of doubting its objectivity with the critical thinking, and let alone young students. Like the students watching the news animation about school bullying in the essay, if they were not taught the right news literacy, they might have thought the report entertaining due to the exaggerated simulate animation. Furthermore, they might have deemed that the young bullying behaviors is not serious and has not to be restrained because the news animation lacks the properly condemnation on the violence of the bullying ones. Even if the National Communications Commission (NCC) regulates the news and promotes the supervision of the news by the audience, most of the present televised news about violence is still without self-control and moderate quality. Thus, we need to supervise the news more actively to propel the change of the news, and teachers as well as parents should teach the young about the proper news literacy education by being good models. In this way, the enhancement of news literacy education in the young students is achievable and the improvement of the news quality is realizable.

Yu-ling Lin (2011).  News Literacy Education in the Digital Age: A Model of Critical News Literacy, Retrieved January, 2012, from National Chiao Tung University, Journal of Cyber Culture and Information Society Website: http://ccis.nctu.edu.tw/issueArticle.asp?P_No=27&CA_ID=336

Peer Comments and Revision List

Peer comments:
How does the young audience have the proper news literacy education?
How about the NCC(National Communications Commission)? Can NCC do something to benefit news literacy education?

Revision list:
Think about the above questions and find out the answers to support my argument

Annotation 4-draft 1

Enhancement of Young Students' News Literacy Education: The Feasible Way to Improve Taiwan's Worse News Quality


    According to Yu-ling Lin, the author of the essay, it is possible that the cultivation of the young students’ critical thinking through enhancing news literacy education is able to urge the improvement of present Taiwan’s news quality. He thinks that the currently over-sensational and overstating news reports resulting in the worse quality of news need to be changed by the audience supervision. And the appropriate supervision has to have the enhancement of news literacy education which is better to start with the young students. In the investigation to prove his discourse, he takes seven young students as subjects to be encouraged and instructed not only to criticize the objectivity of the news but also to reflect themselves what influence of the news on them after watching the news animation about school bullying. The result is that they admit that they have had the experience of bullying and find out the effect of the news on the way they think one thing or event. After receiving the news literacy education, they even post the instruction of that on Facebook Page to let more people enable to learn it. With this experiment, the essay advocates that the teaching and practice of news literacy education on young students seems to be the feasible way to improve Taiwan’s worse news quality.
Indeed, Taiwan’s news is often filled with the exaggerated and biased reporting context to appeal more Taiwan’s viewers who solely accept the information the news provides but lack the deep thinking on the reports. When we watch the televised news, we often bear the curiosity and amusement for the report instead of doubting its objectivity with the critical thinking, and let alone young students. Like the students watching the news animation about school bullying in the essay, if they were not taught the right news literacy, they might have thought the report entertaining due to the exaggerated simulate animation. Furthermore, they might have deemed that the young bullying behaviors is not serious and has not to be restrained because the news animation lacks the properly condemnation on the violence of the bullying ones. For the most of the present televised news about violence without self-control and moderate quality, we, the audience, need to supervise it properly with the right news literacy education, and so do the young students. In this way, the young students will not be influenced by the violent news on the negative side and think about the violence on the critical attitude. Thus, the news literacy education is a feasible way to lessen the potential aggressiveness in school of the young affected by the violent news on TV.

Annotation 3 -draft 2

Taiwan's Televised Reports on Teenage Crimes Can Distort Both Viewer's Perception and Mind 
    In the essay, the author, Dr. 蘇蘅, explores how Taiwan's televised news on teenage crimes and the effects of their ways to represent teenage crimes. With statistics from different television news stations, he finds out two primary factors that bring about the way of their reports on teenage crimes. First factor is the intense competition among Taiwan's televised news. Due to the competitive market, the televised news mostly adopts the serious teenage crime with the live-action and dramatic effect to appeal more viewers. Secondly, the televised news characterizes the sound and the image and has the limit of the reporting time, so  the news values the immediate and striking impression on the spot and tends to represent the partial events to the audience. Consisting in the two factors, the televised news usually reports the teenage crimes like violent harm or murder and  uses the stirring but superficial expressions in the reports. In this way, the broadcast news will possibly distort the perception of the audience.
    Apart from making the prejudiced perception of the audience, the televised news may also inflict the audience's imitation of the crimes. Without the deep examination and the reports on the process of the trial of the crime, the news on the teenage crimes can just bring somewhat entertaining effect to the audience. The viewers are possibly  distorted not only their perceptions but also their mind by the televised news on teenage crimes. With the mind incited by the violence in the report, their behavior can be influenced. That is, when the teenage who cannot properly judge the news see the report, they may think it exciting and funny and imitate it in school, and their doings becomes school bullying consequently. It is common that we are able to watch lots of cases on our televised news reporting teenage crimes.Thus, the discourse o this essay can be an interpretation of the televised violence news' effect on the potential school bullying in Taiwan.

蘇蘅 (2002).  新聞裡的罪與罰--報紙與電視新聞如何再現青少年犯罪 Retrieved January 9, 2009, from NCCU Institutional  Repository Website: http://dspace2.lib.nccu.edu.tw/handle/140.119/28089

Peer Comments and My Respond to Annotation 3

Susie:
i think that it is good generally because you give us the evidence that how the media affect teenager on school bullying

Pearl:
i think you spend too much time on describing the context
maybe it can be shorter and it is also easy for readers catch the point
and it is good that you to mark first secondly...

Lisa:
because i think there are the attributions of causing the news to influence the teenagers. so u think my description is not concise enough?
if it is i'll revise it thank u

Pearl:
i still can know what you write
i means if you can do it
it can be better
because half of your annotation is other's thing

Lisa:
OK

Julia:
so will u come up with a solution? or u just want to discuss about the phenomenon?

Pearl:
it is not really like yours

Lisa:
next annotation i'll come up with a solution

Pearl:
yes yes the annotation is like only phenomenon. your next annotation can do something different